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*The Tree That Was Seen*

Once upon a time, on a planet far away, there lived a little tree. But this was no ordinary tree, no, this little tree could speak. She could speak to the Sun, oh what bright conversations they would have! Every morning he would greet her with a loud, boisterous HELLO!!! and then the two would talk for hours.

They talked about the brightness of his light, his magnificent rays, the perfect symmetrical shape of his body, and how healthy he made her leaves. But before long, the Sun would go to sleep, and a smaller, dimmer, shy little moon would appear in the sky.

He watched over the tree every night, but had never, not even once, said hi. The little tree, being a lover of the day, would fall to sleep, and wait for sunrise. And so it was every day and night, the Sun would shine, the Moon would pass by.

Days, turned to years, and the tree grew strong in the Sun. The Sun, would gloat about what he accomplished. "Look, dear Tree, and see what I've made you! I've made you stronger, I've made you better, and see how beautiful you are with me."

"Yes, I see." said the fair, little tree. For she knew all the things the Sun said were true. Yet, still she wondered. "Sun," she whispered, "Do you think, there's anything special about me?"

"Special? About you? Why certainly!" The sun boasted. "In your leaves I can see a perfect reflection of me!" Silently, the little tree closed her eyes and cried. But the Sun couldn't see beneath her shining leaves. He chatted on while the tree only listened, till finally it was time and the Sun said goodnight.

The little tree shuddered alone in the wind. No one can see me, she thought with tears in her eyes, and started to retreat deep, deep inside…

"Why do you cry?" A sweet voice called in the dark. The little tree opened her eyes to a cool, dim light. When she looked up to see who had spoken, she saw the shy Moon, eyes focused and open.

"You, can see me? But how?" The little tree questioned, and began to look around. The world looked so different in the pale light. And the little tree saw a new world for the first time, as all sorts of creatures came out and bustled about their lives.

"It is true, my light is not the brightest. But I shine enough to see your leaves, and the beauty you hide behind it." The little tree, amazed someone could see her, stayed awake all night, with a smile big, and dimly bright.

In the morning when the Sun arrived singing his usual tune, the tree fell asleep. And the Moon whispered "See you soon."
Okay, no matter how old I get, I will always love a good bedtime story. So, tonight, I decided to attempt something I've never tried: write a children's story for bedtime! *dundunduuuuun* It could use a little editing, mhmm.

UPDATE:
Thank you all for the comments and replies! I suppose I wrote this story with the intention of showing kids to not take people for granted. And sometimes help comes from unexpected places. What do you think??
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Given 2013-12-15
Bedtime Stories : The Tree That Was Seen by ~lostmymind193 A sweet and heartwarming bedtime story. ( Suggested by CelestialMemories and Featured by GrimFace242 )
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Risstastic Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This should be a kids book! :meow:
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014
Thank you so much! I'm actually in the process of writing more bedtime stories to hopefully publish, along with this one, in a book as a series!

Also keeping my eye open for an illustrator for them...lol.
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Risstastic Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I (and I'm sure hundreds or more of others) wish you the best of luck! :hug:
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akrasiel Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014   General Artist
It reads exactly how a bedtime story should. :D
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014
I'm so glad you said that! I thought the flow, and how everything rhymed (kinda) was a little cheesy. haha.
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beatress16 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is lovely. I feel rejuvenated reading this.
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014
Thank you so much! I really love the simplicity of children's stories, and how they can hold so many truths for whatever the child interprets. =)
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beatress16 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I couldn't agree less. The story helped me feel how innocent children were. I'm grateful for that.
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qwibes Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014   Writer
I would translate this, to read to my kid when I have one :)
It is truly inspiring. :heart:
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014
Oh what language??? I'd love to see this translated. =)
Thank you!
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qwibes Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014   Writer
Oh haha, my first language is Dutch (I'm from the Netherlands). If you'd like it, I might actually do it :P
You're welcome. :)
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner May 16, 2014
I really love your story! It really touched me inside and I felt like crying too, with the little tree, I feel that way too like no one sees me. I think you did excellently with writing your first childen's story. I think you could write a children's book of bedtime stories! :D :iconautumntree3plz:
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014
Thank you so much, my good friend! It's kind of somber for children's stories. I'm working on another installation for the bed time series but I'm having a really really reeeeally hard time with it. =/
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014
I know what it's like to have writer's block and the extreme dificulty of finding the right words! It's a horrible feeling...I wish you the best of luck with your new children's story! I really loved your first one and will look forward to the next...:iconshinyheartplz:
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Sort-of-Story Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014
Very beautiful story.
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thank you very much! bed time is one of my favorite times. haha.
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de-X-cipher Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
congrats on the daily deviation.

I loved this. its a perfect bedtime story and one ill have to tell my nephew :)
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thank you! You'll have to tell me what he thinks of it. =) 

p.s. I think i may have thanked you multiple times for watching me...i must have a memory lapse. lol. (and forgot to delete the dA messages.) Sorry!
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de-X-cipher Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i will, he likes it when he has things read to him. :)

you didn't and even if you did it's fine. these things can happen. :)
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Congrats on DD & DLD :nod:
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
Thank you! I'm working on a second bedtime story now. =)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
Thank you very much. =)
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brietta-a-m-f Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I absolutely love this! It is a wonderful example of a children's story--short, soft and with a gentle lesson thrown in. It reminds me a lot of William Joyce or Max Lucado, and I think it could give both of them a run for their money,

 

Would you mind if I did a drawing based off of this at some point? I would credit you, of course. It brings a lot of wonderful images to my mind. 

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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
wow! that's so a kind comment, thank you! I apologize for taking so long to reply. 

I would love to see your drawing!!! 
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brietta-a-m-f Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha! Now it's my turn to be long in responding!

Unfortunately, life has hit me with a gigantic wave, and the drawing remains unfinished, however, I will let you know (and credit your inspirational stroy, of course!!) as soon as it is finished!
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MatthewKoon Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013
Who would have thought bedtime stories could be worth reading. Because this one was just amazing. Congrats to you! 
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
thank you! that truly means a lot to me. bedtime stories are a forgotten realm of literature! lol
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Morning-Star-42 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! /'o'\  It's just so sweet!
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
that's a lot of awwwwwhs. hehe. thank you! 
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rosepetal179 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
that is so beautiful! I love how special it is..
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
thank you very much. i tried to write about something that wasn't already out there. =)
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rosepetal179 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013
you are very welcome!!!
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mistyquail Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
congratulations on your amazing talent. it was a joy to read ^.^
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
thank yoooou! you makea blusha. sorry, i just felt a need to go into an italian accent just then. I'm so glad you enjoyed my cheesy bedtime story part 1!
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Devilchild93 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
SO CUTE! This could totally be a children's book with beautiful illustrations.
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
oh thank you! that's my ultimate dream for it. a very far faaaar away dream. haha
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
thank you kindly!! the dA community is so amazing. ^-^
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hyperanimegirl4lyfe Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
this is amazing! i've always thought that the moon was more "humble" than the sun, so reading this confirms it in bedtime story form!! this is a great read!!! ><
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
thank you so much! i've always loved the moon, i love the sun too but i feel like it's very under-rated in books and stories. 

although there is a rather catchy tune about a cat running with some silverware and super olympic-level jumping cow...
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hyperanimegirl4lyfe Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
lol, very true XP
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ibx Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
AHEY+




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deluxxy Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
I love this so much. How beautiful and creative, please write more!!!!!
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
i've kinda been tossing a couple of ideas around for a 2nd bedtime story buuuut it hasn't, uhmm, materialized. lol. 
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deluxxy Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
Well this one is perfect!! :D
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
haha. thank you!

that's a lot of pressure!
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deluxxy Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
Sorry! XD But sometimes I personally just let my mind go with the paper/ keyboard or whatever you use to write, then sometimes it comes out nice!
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lostmymind193 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
mine's usually dark. haha. not sure why...
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deluxxy Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013
Sometimes me too, but don't give up :meow:
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